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Post by Made2LuvU on Jul 5, 2006 15:09:15 GMT -5
It's great so far, Kevin! I haven't got to read the whole thing yet, but what I've read rocks!
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Post by T!mxthy on Jul 6, 2006 13:33:16 GMT -5
Coolness,
I can tell you put a lot of effort into this so good job! hehehe, I invented my own explanation for what killed the dude...
Patrick had been driving since that morning. He was tired. He was passing through a little town when he remembered his promise to his daughter. "Daddy," little Sarah had said that morning, "will you bring me back something, please?" "Of course, dear." had been his reply. But he had completely forgot. He looked around for a store where he could stop and buy something for her. He drove around the small town for a while before he finally spotted a hardware store. He quickly ran in and bought a piece of wood. Sarah would be thrilled. He was making his way back to the car when something caught his eye. A vending machine. "Praise the Lord!" exclaimed Patrick, "Caffeine." He inserted a dollar bill and hastily pressed a button, unaware of the terrible fate that was about to befall him. "Mmm, Dr. Pepper," he said as he put the piece of wood in the trunk of his car. But this was no Dr. Pepper. He popped the top and took a swig of the fizzy brown liquid. His eyes grew large as the fatal realization came upon him. It couldn't be! He gagged involuntarily as some of the vile drink went down his throat. He knew this taste; like stale Coke, only worse. He looked at the can and his worst fears were confirmed. There, in big taunting letters was the word, PEPSI. Patrick's vision became blurry. He fell to the ground and began going into spasms, foam spilling out of his mouth. His last thought was, Why does anyone buy this stuff? And then he died.
lol there's a moral to this story but I'm sure you can figure it out for yourself.
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Post by Made2LuvU on Jul 6, 2006 17:55:58 GMT -5
Tim, I like the constructive critisim thing, but maybe we could tone down the "disappointment" thing just a tad, lol
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Post by T!mxthy on Jul 6, 2006 20:58:14 GMT -5
It said 'constructive critisism' was okay but Ill change it if I must.
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Post by Made2LuvU on Jul 6, 2006 23:26:33 GMT -5
No, you don't have to. I just thought the 'disappointing' part was a little harsh, but yeah, I guess I should've considered what constructive critisim really is. Sorry.
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Post by wooffice on Nov 28, 2010 20:27:50 GMT -5
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